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They're only words, a bunch of letters,
Black marks on a bright screen,
So why can't she bring herself to delete them,
Put them where they'll never again be seen?

All it would take is one push of a button,
And they would be gone for eternity,
She wouldn't have to endure them,
Those loving words of agony.

She doesn't understand,
She's not a glutton for pain,
Yet she can't tell anyone about it,
Else they'd think her insane.

But as she gazes down at those beautiful words,
She can't stop the glittering in her eyes,
Can't she keep them a little longer?
Just until her love for you dies?

She hates herself for being so weak,
And she knows what she should do,
But she's afraid of doing it,
Because she's terrified of forgetting you.

Only one thing she knows for certain,
And it must stay true,
She can't let you know how much she hurts,
Because she knows it would kill you.
I think this turned out alright, hopefully it evokes some of the emotion I wanted to portray. I think it would be too easy to just tell you the meaning XD though personally I think it's fairly obvious.
Comments would be very much appreciated :D
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Reminds me of those pictures I rarely can bring myself to look at, and will probably never bring myself to throw out...if that makes sense. Wonderful.
Yeah, I know what you mean. Thanks for the comment and fave :hug:
This is so wonderfully done, and certainly relatable. You do a fantastic job of flowing the language into a rhyme scheme, something that often feels forced. I love the way you combine blunt questioning with eloquent imagery.

Keep writing! :)

Thank you! I love it when people's comments tell me what it is they like about my stuff and what they think works well :D
Cibbwin Jun 13, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Your meaning is obvious. :)

Your rhymes are almost childlike in their simplicity, which lends your words a certain strength. That quality makes this all the more desolate.

Great work!
neonsquiggle Jun 12, 2010  Hobbyist Writer
Aww. How sad. (:
I can relate, too. Good job.
yeah, sucks doesn't it? oh welll. thanks for the fave :)
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